Elaine (minoriko) wrote in burningdumpster,

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Quick update on Kit19's fic.

Go away. You're making my side look stupid.

A cross between a troll and a self-insert for today's report... a little dull after the Kit/Shi travesty.

Story Or Series Title: Griffin's Flight
Culprit Author's Name: thecallingrule WHEREVER YOU WILL GO!!11!11one!1

Full Name (plus titles if any): Griffin
Full Species(es): Professor X's daughter Human psychic.
Distinguishing Features: "Griffin is a psychic! She has agents chasing her! She doesn't know who they are! She doesn't even know she's Psychic!"
Special Possessions (if any): None.

Annoying Origin: The Matrix.
Annoying Connections To Canon Characters: None. All are original characters.
Annoying Special Abilities: OMG THERE'RE VOICES IN MY HEAD Psychic.
Other Annoying Traits: Agents are chasing her because she's psychic. She's not unplugged, and yet picks up a ringing phone and disappear.

The "Plot": This Sue is psychic, but she doesn't know it. Suddenly, loud!ringing!voices! go on in her head. By picking up the phone, she gets transported into a dark void. In the next chapter, she's now on board a ship called A'Tiluta, crew names Thata, Troy, Tau and Omega.
Best Line: “ARGH!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!” I screamed as pain blazed in my head.

Please include a sample of the worst of this story:

“erm... your on the ship A'Tiluta our location is.... Let me see... Nor-Nor-East... under London Bridge... I think... It is the year 2564... approximately any ways... and you Griffin have been living in a dream world called The Matrix.”

“No wonder I feel ill! I always get seasick!”

Omega laughed knowingly

“And what is the Matrix exactly... I know it’s what I’ve been searching for but I don’t know what it is...”

“The Matrix is a computer program prison...”

”What like the Dark Room?”

“The what?”

“The Darkroom... That was the place where I was before I landed in a heap on the floor of the... Atili did you say? Some body kept on shutting the entrance to it... I don’t know how I got there... and I don’t know how I got out...”

“You were here before you fell off your bed Griffin...” Was Omega’s puzzled reply “I’ve never heard of the Darkroom before though... I’ll ask Troy when he comes... Oh here he is! Troy have you heard of The Dark Room?”

“The what?”

I found myself repeating what had just been said...

“It was like a prison... really weird.. kind of cold and dark... I hated it there...”

“Griffin... when you left the matrix... did you here voices in your head?”

“Yeah... but I thought it was just adrenalin! And how did you know about the voices?”

“Were they the same voices that you heard just before?”

I thought for a second... “Yes... but the ones I heard just now were more intense and painful”
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